Saturday 25 January 2014

O Stars on high -- 星， 黑漆穹蒼點點晶


O Stars on high --

 Spark'ing dots in dark, endless skies.

 Floating clouds sparse --

Brightly shines the Moon in space clear
Amid diamond sparks far and near.


"Take 2" for the following little ci:


TUNE: Shí Liù Zì Lìng: "16-character Ci "
TITLE: Xīng: "Stars" 
-- by 一老年人 'A Man of Advanced Years'
--  Translated by Frank C Yue


  《十六字令 ‧ 星》 一老年人

              星，
            
             黑漆穹蒼點點晶。

              浮雲少，  清碧伴娟明。
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2 comments:

  1. Unknown26 January 2014 at 02:01

    Just my second thought:

    Star!
    Sparkling in the dark and endless sky afar.
    Clouds floats few,
    A clear sky with a moon shining brightly still!.

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  2. Frank Yue26 January 2014 at 15:47


    thank you Cyberman2046,

    for your contributions.

    i don't think i'm really qualified to suggest any amendment to your pieces.
    but in this particular ci, the author did explain to me that the last line
    " 清碧伴娟明 " in fact refers to both the Moon and the stars shining. so, a suggested version might be:


    Stars!
    Sparkling in the dark and endless dome afar.

    Clouds float few,
    Clear star-studded sky with Moon shining brightly still!

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